Final Paper Draft and Peer Review
LIB495 Peer Review Worksheet
Is the paper’s thesis clearly stated? Try to state what you think the thesis is, so the author can see if you understood the paper properly.
I believe that the following is the thesis statement, “In the United States, child abuse is one of the aspects that require a compelling attention from the government, the nongovernmental organizations, society, and even individuals.”
Does the thesis seem original and significant? How might the author better communicate the importance of the research project?
I feel that the thesis should be more direct. I read a lot about the different steps of the Erickson study and how they related to child abuse.
As far as you can tell, does the bibliography include a sufficient number and variety of sources? Do the references seem like the right kind of sources for the paper’s project? Do the sources seem reliable? What other types of sources might the author consult?
I do not believe you have enough sources for your paper. You should have a minimum of 10 sources. I also believe you should have recent (less than 5 years old) for studies. Scholarly resources from Ebrary are a great way to start.
Does the paper provide adequate evidence to prove that the thesis is true? What sort of evidence is missing? How could the argument be strengthened?
I would like to see other experts, doctors, psychologists, that are in the child abuse field. Additional studies that strength your argument. There are over 12,000 peer reviewed academic journals available on the Ashford library.
Does the paper adequately anticipate and respond to possible objections? What other specific objections ought the author consider?
I don’t feel like you can really object to impacts of child abuse on growth and development. I feel as if this is an informational paper about what the impacts are though I don’t see what we can do to change them.
Does the author’s writing style seem appropriate? Does the order and structure of the paper make sense? How might the author make the paper’s argument clearer and more convincing?
I feel if the author wants to discuss the impact of child abuse the proposal should clearly state which impacts the author is concerned about and how it can be worked on. I also feel that their should be a format of discussing the history of child abuse, who, when, where, why. Data that follows the argument of the negative impact of child abuse.
What other advice do you have to improve the paper?
I would work on my thesis, go to the thesis generator at https://awc.ashford.edu/writing-tools-thesis-generator.html. I would also look at the thesis handout https://awc.ashford.edu/essay-dev-prompt-to-thesis-handout.html.
Make sure each paragraph has a topic, information and/or evidence about the topic and your explanation of how the topic relates to your overall argument.