Assignment 4: Persuasive Paper Part 3: Possible Disadvantages, Answers, with Visuals Using feedback from your professor and classmates, revise Parts 1 and 2, and add Part 3. Plan to include visuals t

Appendix C: Peer Review Feedback Form 3

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Assignment 4: Persuasive Paper Part 3: Possible Disadvantages and Answers

Peer reviews should provide feedback to a peer on the criteria expected in the paper. Follow these instructions:

Receive a classmate’s paper from the the “Essay Drop off / Pick up Zone” in Week 6.
Download the Peer Review Feedback Form from Blackboard.
Comment on all criteria, noting strengths and / or areas for improvement on the feedback form.
Provide completed Peer Review Feedback Form and classmate’s paper to your professor.

Note: On-ground students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor during the class meeting in which the paper is reviewed; online students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor via the Assignment Tab in the course shell.

Criteria		Comments
+ Strengths	< Opportunities for Improvement
	Included a defensible, relevant thesis statement in the first paragraph.	Stated the topic	Poor grammar made it hard to have a clear understanding of your thesis
	State, explain, and support the first disadvantage (economic, social, political, environmental, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution and provide a logical answer. This should be one (1) paragraph.		Did not see a clear disadvantage listed. You referenced politicians seeking monetary gain from temporarily implementing certain laws but I couldn’t decipher a clear disadvantage here
	State, explain, and support the second disadvantage (and third if appropriate) (economic, social, political, environmental, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution and provide a logical answer. This should be one (1) or two (2) paragraph(s).		The second disadvantage listed did not appear to be a true disadvantage. Your paper stated “The lobby group will still oppose some of the solutions. Psychologically, people enjoy when they are allowed to do what they want but when the law's requirements are implemented some will still oppose it.” I was unclear on how this was a disadvantage and what the solution for it would be
	Include one or two (1-2) relevant visual and help illustrate an advantage.		Did not note relevant visuals
	Use effective transitional words, phrases, and sentences.		Needs a little more work on transitional phrases and sentences
	Provide a concluding paragraph to summarize the proposed solution, its advantages, possible disadvantages, and answers to the disadvantages. Repeat or rephrase your thesis statement.	Several good points were made	Your advantages and disadvantages need to be a little more cohesive and it was hard to be clear on how your proposed solution would be implemented and what it exactly was
	Develop a coherently structured paper with an introduction, body, and conclusion.	Formatting was pretty good	Overall format was good but needs to be a little more organized in terms of following coherent research and transitioning from topic, to disadvantage, to solution
	Use one (1) or more rhetorical strategy(-ies) (ethos, logos, pathos) to explain claims.	Appealed to logic when explaining accident related issues	Need to do a little more on turning facts about motorcycles into valuable information related to the topic in terms of solutions
	Support disadvantages and answer with at least two (2) additional quality relevant references. Use at least eight (8) total for Parts 1, 2, and 3 total.	Several quality references listed	Not really clear on the noted disadvantages, seemed more to note “random” facts
10	Clarity, writing mechanics, and APA formatting requirements (including in-text citations and reference page).	Overall formatting was ok	Lacked clarity, significant grammatical errors, needs better transitioning and clearer presentation with advantages, disadvantages, and solutions
11	Other	I think you’re on the right track and you have what appear to be great resources