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English | Rubric | Assignment | Autobiographical Incident Essay (35 points)
| Criterion | Exemplary (31-35 points) | Proficient (26-30 points) | Emerging (21-25 points) | Not Evident (below 21 points) | Score and Comments |
| Autobiographical Incident Essay Write an autobiographical incident essay about a memorable event that was important because reasons, actions, or consequences, summarizing and reflecting on events, experiences, or character/s while wrapping up the story. Points Possible: 8 | Student submits a 500–750 word autobiographical incident essay with clear characters, setting, plot, and purpose. Incident is memorable due to the reasons, actions, or consequences. Essay clearly summarizes or reflects on the experiences or events revealing a life lesson or important event. | Student submits a 500–750 word autobiographical incident essay with clear characters, setting, plot, and purpose. Incident is memorable but lacks some connection to the reasons, actions, or consequences. Essay summarizes or reflects on the experiences or events revealing a life lesson or important event. | Student submits a 500–750 word autobiographical incident essay with clear characters, setting, plot, and purpose. Incident is somewhat memorable but lacks some connection to the reasons, actions, or consequences. Essay summarizes or reflects on the experiences or events without clearly revealing a life lesson or important event. | Student submission does not meet requirement for length and does not contain one or more of the elements: characters, setting, plot, or purpose. Incident is not portrayed as memorable or lacks connection to reasons, actions, or consequences. Essay contains little summary or reflection. | Score: Comments: |
| Dialogue Use language that shows and dialogue Points Possible: 6 | Essay uses colorful dialogue to effectively reveal character and to move the plot forward. | Essay uses dialogue to reveal character and to move the plot forward. | Essay attempts to use dialogue to reveal character and to move the plot forward. | Essay does not use dialogue, or dialogue is ineffective. | Score: Comments: |
| Imagery Points Possible: 6 | Essay uses vivid sensory imagery to establish a clear mood. | Essay uses imagery to establish a mood. | Essay attempts to use imagery to establish a mood. | Essay does not use sensory imagery to establish a mood. | Score: Comments: |
| Point of View Use first-person point of view. Points Possible: 4 | Essay maintains consistent first-person point of view. | Essay maintains mostly consistent first-person point of view. | Essay maintains somewhat consistent first-person point of view. | Essay does not maintain consistent first-person point of view. | Score: Comments: |
| Organization Use chronological order. Points Possible: 3 | Essay uses chronological order to effectively construct an autobiographical incident. | Essay uses chronological order to construct an autobiographical incident. | Essay attempts to use chronological order to effectively construct an autobiographical incident. | Essay does not use chronological order to effectively construct an autobiographical incident. | Score: Comments: |
| Revisions Correct sentences containing wordiness or redundancy. Points Possible: 5 | Essay demonstrates significant revisions resulting in a more coherent, unified paper that clearly depicts an autobiographical incident. | Essay demonstrates revisions resulting in a more coherent, unified paper that depicts an autobiographical incident. | Essay demonstrates some revisions resulting in a paper that depicts an autobiographical incident. | Essay demonstrates little or no revision. | Score: Comments: |
| Mechanics/Conventions Points Possible: 3 | Essay is free of grammatical or spelling errors. | Essay has three or fewer errors in grammar or spelling. Errors do not interfere with understanding. | Essay has 4–8 grammatical and spelling errors. Errors interfere with understanding. | Essay has more than eight grammatical and spelling errors. Errors interfere with understanding. | Score: Comments: |
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