I need help with redoing this assignment. I have attached the assignment itself and along the brainstorming that was to support the assignment. My instructor feedback "Your topic and title don't mesh

Expository Essay Topic: Brainstorming and Beginning Research

Essay Title: Three Ways Bullying can negatively impact children

1. Introduction: (Begin with a hook sentence to capture your audience’s attention, then provide a brief background of the topic and end with your thesis statement.)

   1. Hook: Online depression therapy can help improve the patient while they are in treatment.

   2. Additional background information: Online therapy is growing and targets issues pertaining to suicide risk and how the patient participates with the online learning.

1. 1. Mapped Thesis statement (review Topic 3 DQ1 for feedback from instructor): Online therapy have proven to be effective with covering suicide, bullying and self worth.

1. Support

Supporting Point #1 (subtopic 1): Suicide

1. Topic sentence for this first sub-topic: Suicide is very sensitive and it needs a wealth of knowledge to understand so it can be dealth with appropriately.

1. Two to three paraphrased supporting details from your research with in-text citations

   • Supporting paraphrase 1: Over the years there has been an increase in suicide among college students and it has increased by 81% between 2011-2018 (Duffy et al.2019)

• Supporting paraphrase 2: Non the less there hasnt been many trainings of the knowledge with people in charge with the trainings. (morton et al., 2021 torok et al., 2019)

Supporting Point #2 (subtopic 2): Bullying

1. Topic sentence for this second sub-topic:

1. Two to three paraphrased supporting details from your research with in-text citations

   • Supporting paraphrase 1: Bullying is a major issue that impacts people of all ages.

• Supporting paraphrase 2: This effects mental health issues and your overall health.

Supporting Point #3 (subtopic 3): Self worth

1. Topic sentence for this third sub-topic: Self worth plays an important part of a person thoughts, behavior and emotions.
   

1. Two to three paraphrased supporting details from your research with in-text citations

   • Supporting paraphrase 1: Bullying has been identified a major problem across the world. (Hymel & Swearer, 2015; Yeager, Fong, Lee, & Espelage, 2015).

• Supporting paraphrase 2:The most bullying happens in schools and around classmates. (Hymel & Swearer, 2015; Nansel et al., 2001).

1. Conclusion: (Paraphrase your thesis statement, summarize main points, and make final remarks.)
   
   

1. Paraphrase thesis statement: The connection of suicide, bullying and self worth shows how a persons environment can effect a persons mental and emotional well being.

1. Summarize main points: Some of the main points that involve with suicide, bullying and self worth. Look for signs such as risk factors could include depression substance abuse , warning signs that may indicate someone is at risk of suicide, changes in a person behavior, and mood swings. These few points can be a start of studying the problem of suicide and how it can effect families and communities.

References

Organize all references you will use in the essay and list them in the space below in alphabetical order based on author’s last name. Be sure the reference page is double-spaced and formatted to have hanging indents by ½ an inch, with the first line hanging and all others indented. See the APA Style Guide located in the Writing Center of the GCU Student Success Center website for help with formatting references and citations. Within the essay, this reference page will be on its own page at the bottom of your essay.

APA 7th Edition

(American Psychological Assoc.)

References

Konishi, C., Hymel, S., Danbrook, M. C., & Wong, T. K. Y. (2019). Changes in bullying in relation to friends, competitiveness, and self-worth. Canadian Journal of School Psychology, 34(3), 234–248. https://doi-org.lopes.idm.oclc.org/10.1177/0829573518765519