Research Paper: Main Question: "how do muslim leaders and communities respond to honor killings in pakistan" Guidelines have been attached, ALSO i need you to add the Connections to class reading in

Feedback:

1. Your argument is not clear. Please have an “I argue..” (Intro) and “I’ve argued..” (Conc) sentences as needed.

2. You still do not have enough number of scholarly sources (both in-class and outside class) used to support your discussion.  Please review the PPT slides uploaded on DB as well as your own notes from the readings to see what kinds of points (it might even be 2-3 sentences for each of those articles) you can connect to other readings. Gender and activism weeks are very relevant for you; but so some other weeks as well. We discussed community efforts in multiple weeks. Just review what we have covered in the class and I’m sure you will find connections. Please make sure the paper meets the minimum number of works that need to be cited. (at least 6 scholarly- outside class) (6 in class)

3. In parenthesis references you need the year of the publication as well. Please carefully follow the Chicago citation system or any other system consistently. At the grad level, correct reference system is very important.

4. You still have too many very short paragraphs. We need longer paragraphs in academic writing. Too many short paragraphs give the impression of “messy notes.” Please try to have a greater number of longer paragraphs. Once you state the “topic sentence” at the beginning of a paragraph, you can use the rest of the paragraph to elaborate and substantiate that point. So, do not only state, but also elaborate.

5. You demonstrate overall strong critical thinking skills, but you can strengthen the “global” analysis as this is a Global Affairs program. For instance, you mention that Western actors approach honor killings as an Islam problem, but you do not offer any empirical examples. Can you discuss in one paragraph or so how global actors are involved in this local fight against honor killings? Or, it would be helpful to emphasize the role of the diaspora Pakistani NGOs in fighting against the honor killings.

In class readings- (incorporate these as well please, make a connection to the topic from these)

Please add more scholarly sources

Abbink, Jon. 2020 “Religion and violence in the Horn of Africa: Trajectories of mimetic rivalry and escalation between ‘political Islam’ and the State.”

Bonci, Alessandra. 2021, “Pious and illiberal Muslim activist women resisting Tunisianité in post-2011 Tunisia.”

Dutta, Sagnik. 2022. “Becoming equals: the meaning and practice of gender equality in an Islamic feminist movement in India.”

Hamdy, Sherene. 2012. Our Bodies Belong to God: Organ Transplants, Islam, and the Struggle for Human Dignity in Egypt.

Safi, Louay M. 2021. Islam and the Trajectory of Globalization: Rational Idealism and the Structure of World History.