Composition: Writing with a Strategy — D269 RGM3 SUBMIT IN DIFFERENT DOCUMENTS TASK 1 Introduction Effective writers know how to tailor their text for a specific purpose and a specific audience. For e
NAME: Jude Atemafac
INSTITUTION: Western Governors University
COURSE TITLE: RGM3
INSTRUCTOR’S NAME: Jen Krisuk
DUE DATE: 2025/09/03
Revision and Editing Part A: Revised Text
My wife requested that I take her to one of the seafood restaurants last week to celebrate our anniversary. We decided on Surf n Turf at Buster Bronco, and the review below is my own description of why I gave a rating of three out of five stars to the restaurant.
To start with, the ambiance is less formal and more relaxed. It does not force visitors to come in and walk around in their loose attire. The interiors are decorated in the style of a traditional seafood restaurant: nets, scuba gear, and even Gus the Talking Bass welcomes the buyer at the door. The lightness and fun of eating are brought out in these touches.
As far as food is concerned, Buster Bronco serves some first-rate food. Fish tacos have a pleasant taste, served with seasoned fries, and the shrimp entrée is very popular and fulfilling. The bottomless seafood shrimp quota is noteworthy as well — I had taken three sittings, and the staff still kept filling my plate. The appearance of foods is generally attractive and satisfies the casual restaurant standards.
The service was, however, average, and hence I have subtracted one star. Our waitress seemed more efficient than attentive, but she did provide us with additional water and napkins without our request.
Last but not least is cost. My wife felt that the entrées were costlier than they should have been based on the portion sizes, and I disagreed. Generally, I usually grab some leftover Rafe, and the average entrée cost of $ 20 does not seem expensive to me. This perspective contrast shows how value may be conditional upon customer expectations.
In conclusion, the Surf n’ Turf by Buster Bronco offers good seafood in a fun and casual atmosphere. Still, the service quality and pricing perceptions can significantly influence how customers rate the experience.
Part B: Explanation of Changes Revisions (form, content, and structure): 1. Restaurant name and introduction revised and refined: changed the title, SurfnTurf to Surf n’ Turf, and the introduction sentence was rearranged to make it clear and professional. 2. Food section consolidated: Brought scattered descriptions of food together to form one unified paragraph that brings out the quality, variety, and display of food. 3. Section on cost explained: Improved the disparities between the reviewer's opinion and the spouse's opinion so that the value can be presented clearly and thoughtfully discussed. Edits (grammar, punctuation, choice of words): 1. Adapted makes an excellent fish taco, giving you a few memorable meals... The fish tacos are spicy to enhance grammar and tone. 2. Substituted outta there with efficiency-oriented to be professional. 3. The word doggie bag was changed to leftovers to be more understandable and more professional. 4. Better flow of the sentence through the transformation of the first sentence with But hey, it is my opinion to This difference in perspective to show that there is a transition in the sphere. 5. Adjusted minor mistakes of punctuation, like adding commas to make the punctuation easy to understand and read. Part C: Response to Original Text. In the original introduction, it worked partly, since it mentioned what the purpose of the review was and the three-star rating. It was, however, excessively reliant on colloquial expressions and could have been improved by refining its introduction into formal criticism, thereby highlighting the unique, individual experience of the personality that is more relatable in the epistemological, sensuous, and instinctive domains. Strengths: This is the best part of the text because it describes the food items so well, especially the fish tacos and the unending shrimp platter. Such information forms an attractive picture in the mind of the reader and effectively summarizes the advantages of the restaurant. Conclusion: The initial conclusion was weak, as it concluded abruptly with "you may disagree," which was not a firm conclusion for the review. The updated conclusion brings closure by balancing the restaurant's positive attributes with areas needing improvement, presenting the reader with a professionalized view of the restaurant and potential improvements.
