revise psychology paper using feedback I provide
| Criteria | Points Possible | Points Earned | Comments | ||||
| Content | Intro of a relevant specific thesis/focus & why important | 10 | 5 | Need thesis | |||
| Clear link from Research finding 1 to specific thesis/focus | 5 | 0 | Need thesis | ||||
| Clear link from Research finding 2 to specific thesis/focus | 5 | 0 | |||||
| Clear link from false news example 1 to specific thesis/focus | 5 | 0 | |||||
| Clear link from false news example 2 to specific thesis/focus | 5 | 0 | |||||
| Concluding summary integrates evidence & examples, addresses specific thesis/focus, & elaborates | 10 | 5 | Because no thesis it didn't correct fully | ||||
| Mechanics | Organization of paper (clear flow, logic) | 5 | 4 | ||||
| APA style (title page, citations, & reference list) | 5 | 4 | |||||
Additional Comments: You were clear with description, but considering you didn't have a thesis. It wasn't be organized. Clearly state your argument in intro and refer to it throughout the paper. Also, really check APA errors! This paper has a lot of potential, be sure to follow my feedback.
Running Head: BIAS AND FALSE NEWS
Bias and False News were your titles would be. For APA don't split up into separate sections. Rewrite without section titles.
Page 3 (New page 4), first paragraph, Medically defined, mental scotoma is a figurative blind spot in a person’s psychological awareness, the patient being unable to agin insight into and to understand his mental problems.” (Farlex, 2012) (Why is here quotation mark?)
Conclusion: Try to expand by a few sentences elaborating some evidence you toward(?) that got you to this point.
Reference: Need to be double-spaced; doesn't need indentation, needs hanging indent
