policy development on the use of social media

Professor comments from policy draft

Good research on the topic. It is a little short of the required length, but my next suggestion would likely help that.

Do not write in the first person.

Do not say "feel" when you mean "think:"

For the final, alter the format from a "paper" to a Memo and actually create a policy for a hypothetical department and provide the supportive basis in it. 

Cover the legal reason or basis for what is prohibited/protected speech, because there is law on that topic. I want you to find and name the governing case on this topic. Officers should be able to delineate the line between protected or permitted and prohibited speech. Sound judgment or common sense or thinking beforehand is not a gauge.

Does your proposed policy cover off-duty officers as well as on duty?  

What specifically can be disclosed on the web, uniforms/department patches/crime scene pics/ pics of evidence? How long may a patrolman surf the net while patrolling, if at all?

Was there an interview with anyone? There should have been and if so, and they gave you the time of day, you should at least give them “honorable mention.”

What does your local department do on the topic of having a website? What specific positive things may your department permit or allow with regard to the community?