Narrative Scoring Assignment

Student Text

(Third Grade)

My Tooth

Have you ever swallowed your tooth before?

Well, I have. It was a bright, shiny day and my dad,

my sister and I went to Lowe’s. When we went to the

cash register my sister and I sat on the bench. I was

wiggling my tooth so she smacked me on the back in

accident. She smacked me on the back so hard my

tooth came out. I was shocked!

“I’m sorry! I’m sorry! I’m Sorry!” My sister

hollered.

“It’s ok,” I replied. Blood was gushing out of

my gums. Then my dad gave me a paper towel. I ran

to the restroom. I went straight for the trashcan to

throw away the paper towel, but I didn’t see my

tooth in paper towel. I ran all the way back to the

cash register.

“Dad, I didn’t see my tooth in the paper

towel!” I hollered.

“Maybe you swallowed it,” my dad said.

“Swallowed it!” I screamed. “If I swallowed

then I will not get money form the Tooth

Fairy,” I said disappointedly.

My dad whispered, “Maybe you can write a

letter.”

“That’s a good idea, dad!” So when I went to

my house I wrote the letter. The next morning I

didn’t look under my pillow. I just went straight for

the television. When my sister woke up she looked

under my pillow without asking me. When she

looked under my pillow she saw a 5 dollars. When

she saw the 5 dollars under my pillow her mouth

dropped. She ran over to me and said, “Mary I found

5 dollars under your pillow!”

I thought, “I wonder when I’m going to loose

my next tooth?”

Student Text

(Fifth Grade)

A Horrible Day

Have you ever sufferd so much pain in your

life. I have and it wasnt pretty.

It started out like the most wonderful day of my

life. It was the last day of fourth grade and my

whole class was excited and sad at the same time

but we had a water fight so when I got home I

needed to switch my clothes since I was soackend

wet, and I remembered that my mom had bought

me some new sandles. I placed them on and

rushed out to go enough myself out side.

When I got outside every body was around the

tallest smootheist tree shouting the cats goinog to

fall!!! So I rushed over there to see and found out

that it was my little kitty so I tried to climb up to

get it, but since the tree was slippery I slipped and

landed on my poor hand I felt a crack.

I cried and cried that it was like a river of tears.

My mom came out crying because she heard what

happened so she drove me to the hospital as

quickly as she could, but every time she would

turn I would feel my bone, kept craking and I

couldent stop crying. When I got to the hospital I

had to wait a long time, but still I couldent stop

crying.

finally when the doctor saw me He took x-rays

of my arm and told me it was broken I cried even

stronger. They put on a tempory cast just for the

mean time and told my mom to make a apomeint.

When it was time for my apomeint I went in

speedy quick. I have always wondered what it

would be like having a cast and I knew I was

going to get one today. I got to select the color of

cast of course I elected pink. When I was getting

my cast I saw pictures of what happendes if I get my cast wet. So I got very frightened and I was

never close to getting in the water.

The whole summer I was in my room really

bored and hot, but I didn’t want to get my skin

wet either way and I lasted one whole month like

that.

When it was finally the day to get my cast off I

was so cheerful. When I saw what they were

going to use got terrified and the whole I was

hitting the doctor because I was really frightened.

The doctor said that I looked like I was catching

flies.

When it was finally over my hand felt weak. I

couldent do anything with it. When I finally

wanted to play It was time to go back to school I

was furious. So this summer I am going to

observe myself very carefully so I wont Break a

bone again. Every summer something happens to

me, but not this summer. At least I hope nothing