Narrative Scoring Assignment
Student Text
(Third Grade)
My Tooth
Have you ever swallowed your tooth before?
Well, I have. It was a bright, shiny day and my dad,
my sister and I went to Lowe’s. When we went to the
cash register my sister and I sat on the bench. I was
wiggling my tooth so she smacked me on the back in
accident. She smacked me on the back so hard my
tooth came out. I was shocked!
“I’m sorry! I’m sorry! I’m Sorry!” My sister
hollered.
“It’s ok,” I replied. Blood was gushing out of
my gums. Then my dad gave me a paper towel. I ran
to the restroom. I went straight for the trashcan to
throw away the paper towel, but I didn’t see my
tooth in paper towel. I ran all the way back to the
cash register.
“Dad, I didn’t see my tooth in the paper
towel!” I hollered.
“Maybe you swallowed it,” my dad said.
“Swallowed it!” I screamed. “If I swallowed
then I will not get money form the Tooth
Fairy,” I said disappointedly.
My dad whispered, “Maybe you can write a
letter.”
“That’s a good idea, dad!” So when I went to
my house I wrote the letter. The next morning I
didn’t look under my pillow. I just went straight for
the television. When my sister woke up she looked
under my pillow without asking me. When she
looked under my pillow she saw a 5 dollars. When
she saw the 5 dollars under my pillow her mouth
dropped. She ran over to me and said, “Mary I found
5 dollars under your pillow!”
I thought, “I wonder when I’m going to loose
my next tooth?”
Student Text
(Fifth Grade)
A Horrible Day
Have you ever sufferd so much pain in your
life. I have and it wasnt pretty.
It started out like the most wonderful day of my
life. It was the last day of fourth grade and my
whole class was excited and sad at the same time
but we had a water fight so when I got home I
needed to switch my clothes since I was soackend
wet, and I remembered that my mom had bought
me some new sandles. I placed them on and
rushed out to go enough myself out side.
When I got outside every body was around the
tallest smootheist tree shouting the cats goinog to
fall!!! So I rushed over there to see and found out
that it was my little kitty so I tried to climb up to
get it, but since the tree was slippery I slipped and
landed on my poor hand I felt a crack.
I cried and cried that it was like a river of tears.
My mom came out crying because she heard what
happened so she drove me to the hospital as
quickly as she could, but every time she would
turn I would feel my bone, kept craking and I
couldent stop crying. When I got to the hospital I
had to wait a long time, but still I couldent stop
crying.
finally when the doctor saw me He took x-rays
of my arm and told me it was broken I cried even
stronger. They put on a tempory cast just for the
mean time and told my mom to make a apomeint.
When it was time for my apomeint I went in
speedy quick. I have always wondered what it
would be like having a cast and I knew I was
going to get one today. I got to select the color of
cast of course I elected pink. When I was getting
my cast I saw pictures of what happendes if I get my cast wet. So I got very frightened and I was
never close to getting in the water.
The whole summer I was in my room really
bored and hot, but I didn’t want to get my skin
wet either way and I lasted one whole month like
that.
When it was finally the day to get my cast off I
was so cheerful. When I saw what they were
going to use got terrified and the whole I was
hitting the doctor because I was really frightened.
The doctor said that I looked like I was catching
flies.
When it was finally over my hand felt weak. I
couldent do anything with it. When I finally
wanted to play It was time to go back to school I
was furious. So this summer I am going to
observe myself very carefully so I wont Break a
bone again. Every summer something happens to
me, but not this summer. At least I hope nothing