Rough Draft Due Week 7 and worth 150 points     Instructions: Writing Activity 3 has two sections to complete. You will use the writing templates in Webtext chapter 7 to complete them. Once you comple

Writing Activity 2: Starting Draft

Name

ENG 215 - Research & Writing

Dr. Mary Rose Kasraie

March 16, 2020

Outline

1. Introduction

   1. Bullying in school, workplace or any social gathering should be stopped to help victims live normal and stress free.

2. Body

   1. it increase dead rate

      1. it increase the rate of suicides

      2. The study revealed that childhood bullying victims experienced lasting consequences in psychological and mental well-being, eating disorders, as well as trust issues in relationships.

   2. it affect people mentally

      1. In a school setting, bullying does not happen in a vacuum, there is always the victim, the bully and eyewitnesses.

      2. how to stop it among student.

   3. how to get rid of it

      1. The goal of this paper is to persuade individuals in educational setting

      2. Children who are bullied in school are more likely to develop psychiatric disorder and high risk of depression.

   4. Counter Perspective: The author conducted a study to evaluate the relationship between bullying and adverse mental disorders and suicidality among adolescents in Australia.

      1. Response to Counter Perspective: Such behavior make the victim experience low esteem, anxiety, and stress which eventually lead to depression or any other mental disorder like agoraphobia and panic disorders.

3. Conclusion

   1. . This showed that bullying is a serious matter that affects the entire society and requires immediate attention.

Working Thesis Statement

bullying should be stop because it cursing more death in the world, it create fear in the life of loved ones , and it must be stop.

Starting Draft

The author conducted a study to evaluate the relationship between bullying and adverse mental disorders and suicidality among adolescents in Australia. Close to 3500 adolescents were analyzed and results indicated that adolescents who experienced bullying had a increased risk of self-harm, suicidal ideation, and poor mental health outcomes. bullying should be stop because it cursing more death in the world, it create fear in the life of loved ones , and it must be stop.

The study explored mental health implications of observing bullying at school. This was a unique study because it considered the victims instead of the victim of the bully. In a school setting, bullying does not happen in a vacuum, there is always the victim, the bully and eyewitnesses. The study involved about 2000 students from 14 schools and the results demonstrated that those who observed bullying had a higher risk to mental health compared to the direct victims. This showed that bullying is a serious matter that affects the entire society and requires immediate attention.

Feedback Reflection

Feedback from Writing Activity 1:

I got a good feedback

How Feedback Was Used:

expand more on your topic sentences

How Feedback Will Help You with Future Writing:

to avoid distraction and procrastinating