ENGL 140 Signature Assignment (Argumentative Essay) The Argumentative Essay assignment is broken into two key parts: Part A: Argumentative Essay Components (due each week on Sunday): Part B: Argument

ENGL 140 Signature Essay Peer Review Worksheet

Assignment Directions: Your task is to provide high level feedback to at least one of your fellow classmates that should help them improve their final essay. You will need to complete, in its entirety, this peer review worksheet to help your fellow student.

PART ONE: DEMOGRAPHICS

Name of the student whose essay you reviewed:

Your Name: Daniel Placeres

PART TWO: ANALYSIS

Summarize, in three to five sentences, the overall argument being made in this essay. Share your opinion on how well you think this draft meets the assignment requirements.

INPUT: The overall argument mentions the association between bad health and low income. Daniel argues that poverty increases the risk of poor hygienic and health related issues. Mentioned, is the fact that without the proper income healthcare services are limited or not accessible to those in need.

I feel the draft does need more revision, but does meet the requirements provided to our class. I have a clear understanding of the link between poor health and poverty and believe we can make this a great paper.

PART THREE: CONTENT

Address each of the following questions, using complete sentences and specific examples when possible. Remember that you can give both positive and negative answers here to help highlight both the best aspects of the essay and address those areas that need revision.

Format		YES	NO
	Does the essay use appropriate APA formatting, including double spacing, Times New Roman 12 point. Times New Roman font, one-inch margins, and appropriate paragraph indentations?		N
	Can you identify any areas where outside source information appears to be used when no in-text citations are included? Provide specific examples:		N
	When in-text citations are used, do they follow APA formatting?	Y
	Does the essay include the required 8 sources?	Y
	Can you identify any issues with the references page? If so, please provide specific examples: hyperlinks, capitalizations (review “Poverty and health: thirty years of progress?”),	Y

Content		YES	NO
	Can you identify the main argument being made?	Y
	Can you identify the thesis statement? Does it make a claim that can be argued and clearly take a stance?	Y
	Do each of the paragraphs in the essay work to directly support the argument being made in the essay?	Y

Organization

How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the main controversy being addressed?

Introductory paragraph flows, however, his argument needs to be more clear. Before mentioning his point of view on poor health care linked to political injustice, he mentions a point on education, which weakens his argument by diverting the subject. Although I believe this is the argument he was attempting to make, he then begins the body of his essay by discussing correlations between poverty, healthcare, and lifestyle (e.g., diets), which once again scatters his topic.

How easily are topic sentences for each body paragraph identifiable? Be sure to list any body paragraphs that do not appear to have topic sentences.

Topic sentences require reformatting and restructuring. The topic sentences are within his paragraph but are not used properly to transition from the paragraph above (specifically referencing paragraph 3 and 4).

Does the paper make use of transitions effectively? How? Be sure to point out any areas where a topic shift occurs that seems to be abrupt

Please see comment above.

How effective is the conclusion? Does it summarize the main points, reiterate the main argument, and bring the discussion to a logical and satisfying ending?

The conclusion is the strongest paragraph of his essay. While concise, it captures the entire argument that he was making and addressed each topic directly. The only recommendation I offer is to include the implications of this essay and how this relates to society at large.

Grammar and Mechanics

YES

Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction:

Covers: I believe he means “coverage”
Running Head on cover page should be “Running head:”
Missing class, professor and date on cover page.

Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement:

Paragraph 2: “cannot should be able to”
Paragraph 2: “is to poor something on the table.”
Paragraph 4: “in” should be “is”
Paragraph 4: Substitute “unbearable” for another word like “unattainable”
Paragraph 5: “medical covers are way too expensive” should read “medical coverage is way too expensive”
Paragraph 5: “makes it difficult” should read “make it difficult”

PART FOUR: ESSAY CELEBRATIONS

Directions: Share three strengths of this version of the essay.

1.	It’s a good topic, highly controversial.
2.	He mentions good argument points.
3.	Sheds light on the less fortunate socioeconomic class.

PART FIVE: ESSAY ENHANCEMENTS

Directions: Share three aspects of this essay that could be improved upon before the final submission.

1.	Correct grammar
2.	Correct references
3.	Create a better flow

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