ENG 125 Introduction to Literature DQ 3 Week 4

Paper Title: Literacy Analysis No. of Pages: 2 pages Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Other Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No Feedback Areas: Topic Development, Focus/Thesis Statement Paper Goals: Compare your working thesis statement to the thesis statement in the Sample Literary Analysis. Does your thesis address relevant points like the example thesis? Then, look at a body paragraph in the sample Literary Analysis. Compare its construction to a body paragraph in your own paper.

Proofing Summary:

Hello Ricardo, I’m Anja, your tutor for the Writing Center. I have reviewed your submission and have several suggestions that will help you revise. Please feel free to contact us through a live chat session with any follow-up questions or for any clarification.

Below, you will find a revision plan along with margin comments within your paper. Use my suggestions as a starting point for the revision process. Also, please note that I have not edited or proofread the entire draft for minor errors, but rather, focused on overall concerns such as idea development.

You have a good start on your essay. You have done a good job of picking out several areas through which to analyze Mr. Kapasi.

For your revisions, I suggest focusing on:

1. Your thesis statement should 1) contain your debatable claim about the work, and 2) list the specific points you will develop to support your claim. The thesis for a literary analysis should also state the approach that will be taken to discuss the work. See the example below:

In “The Masque of the Red Death,” Poe uses the symbolism of the stranger, the clock, and the seventh room to develop the theme of death.

Based on the sample thesis, the first supporting paragraph will be about how death is symbolized by the stranger.

The second supporting paragraph will be about how death is symbolized by the clock. The third supporting paragraph will be about how death is symbolized by the seventh room.

For help writing a thesis, click here: http://tinyurl.com/h8psxx9 2. As you revise, I suggest working on your overall paragraph development. A good rule of thumb for college papers is that paragraphs should be about 7-11 sentences long.

In general, all paragraphs need to have 3 pieces:

P-Point—also known as your topic sentence where you state what the paragraph is about I-Information—where you present your information (facts, details, quotes, and reasons) E-Explanation—where you explain the relevance or importance of your information Please be sure to do all of this when writing your paragraphs. For help with this, check out this video tutorial on writing paragraphs: http://tinyurl.com/zaxrn9x Good luck in the course, and I hope we can help you with your next assignment. page 1 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp242311 - Tue Jul 4 15:53:52 EDT 2017 Remember to list the title of your essay first in this page. Otherwise, your title page is well formatted! page 2 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp242311 - Tue Jul 4 15:53:52 EDT 2017 This seems like it is the closest to a claim. Remember that the thesis should have the topics of each of your body paragraphs and an arguable claim that you are making about this work. It should not be a mini plot summary.

This is a good topic! Consider making the entire paragraph about this idea and where it is seen in the story. page 3 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp242311 - Tue Jul 4 15:53:52 EDT 2017 This seems like the main point of this paragraph. Consider making it the topic (first) sentence and then developing this idea.

This paragraph also looks rather underdeveloped.

Remember that you need to tell how or why these things are significant to the characterization. page 4 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp242311 - Tue Jul 4 15:53:52 EDT 2017 You have a good start on your conclusion here, but remember that you need to summarize the main idea of each of your body paragraphs separately. page 5 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp242311 - Tue Jul 4 15:53:52 EDT 2017 Remember that the book title and journal name should be italicized.In APA syle, this is a References page rather than a works cited.