A narrative must be descriptive in nature and use the personal pronoun 'I'. I expect to see descriptive writing that appeals to my senses. After reading your essay is has potential and you write clear

A narrative must be descriptive in nature and use the personal pronoun 'I'. I expect to see descriptive writing that appeals to my senses.

After reading your essay is has potential and you write clearly, however, you need to add more descriptive detail and use more personal examples. For example, explain how it feels to be labeled and stereotyped as Generation A and make me see that experience. Show me thought your details.

Also your essay needs to be at least 3 full pages and this is no quite two, so you definitely need to add more detail.