Admissions essay help

Please look up what an occupational therapist is

I am applying to graduate school for a masters in Occupational therapy

I have attached my Rough draft of the essay 

it needs some serious help

i need more exmaples and better grammar please need this done with amazing grammaer and word usage 

REQUIREMENTS FOR THE ESSAY 

• Reflection on your experiences as an OTA. Include your greatest accomplishment; ( need you to make one up i did not include this )  a significant challenge and how it was addressed; and influences on your decision to become an OT. ( need more elaboration on why i want to be an occupational therapist) 

• Your personal qualities that will contribute to the OTA to OT program and the occupational therapy profession. ( MORE DETAILS TO ANSWER THIS )