Can I show you MY thesis for a prompt that I am writing about for my African American history class because I need an opinion and feedback please. I

Can I show you MY thesis for a prompt that I am writing about for my African American history class because I need an opinion and feedback please.

I will provide you with the prompt and I will also include my thesis.

Prompt: This is the prompt. The exploitation of Black labor transitioned in both form and substance from 1860 to 1920.  Craft a thesis statement and essay that analyzes the how and why of the transition from chattel slavery to sharecropping, convict leasing and debt peonage. 

My thesis:The transition between the years 1860 to 1920 was not something that can just pass by as nothing it was to take advantage of the African Americans during that time period. By taking advantage of the African Americans the whites got exactly what they wanted. Keep in mind though, the African American slaves including children did not get paid for the labor they were doing. They did labor such as sharecropping, convict leasing and debt peonage.

And this regards my thesis so please DO NOT mark this as plagiarism or anything like that I really need help.