Can you make this sound professional please and do some editing. Some people believe being happy and having a strong spiritual connection is what's

Can you make this sound professional please and do some editing.

Some people believe being happy and having a strong spiritual connection is what's most important in life, while others believe money and one's financial status is the key factor in determining how successful they are. However, what most people don't think about is how huge of a part failure and making mistakes has in achieving success. Many people view failure as a digression, a sign that they should give up and stop trying because they fear the possibility of failing again. However, it is important to recognize that making mistakes is a form of progress because we can learn from our failures along the way.