Critiquing sample paper-Accounting

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"Budgeting- Writing the Report"  Please respond to the following:

Critique the sample paper provided below. Add appropriate comments, noting good and bad aspects of the paper. Use the rubric to make a numerical evaluation. Report each category of the rubric and the points you give the paper. Provide a total points and letter grade. Be sure to give specific details to support your evaluation of each area. 

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                Babycakes Company is a specialty bakery that serves baked goods that are vegan friendly, and are gluten free.  Their products are also kosher.  This specialty bakery has gained traction since its opening in 2005 in NYC.  They currently have three store locations: New York City, Los Angeles California, and Orlando Florida.  They also have an online ordering option and ship goods nationwide (