EDITING

Hello

I have uploaded the orginal paper. Here is the editing instructions.

1.there are some blue mark check the second file, that's from my tutor.

2.please add citation on the first paragraph. and also the last thesis statement doesn't have in parallel form, so I lose some points.

3.the third paragraph need reorganization , krashen doesn't have this point of view. and this entire paragraph should emphesis the formal instruction. and there is a sentence belongs to new point of view. it should be deleted or change to an example or evidence in sepecific .

4. please add more examples to describe the children how to study.

5. two body paragraphs should have a lot of changes. and others need small changes. also  the body paragraph need more research. at least 7 research. for each body paragraph need 3 and also do the reorganization. write more specifically. 

5 paragraphs in TOTAL

please check the second file as an reference.  Also  all the source that you add, must from google scolar. 

Note: this is my last chance to get more points for the assignment. Thanks.