English Paper

5-6 Assignment 2, Milestone 1: Draft

See the rubric.

Do not cut and paste large sections of Wikipedia pages together to create a paper. This is plagiarism. Please aquatint yourself with the consequences thereof. You need to remove all Wikipedia material from this paper, create a central argument that you can defend and support, and use databases from the library to find peer-reviewed resources. Use the “Ask a librarian” feature for help with research and submit to the online writing center for help with organization and proofreading. Do not surf the internet or use Wikipedia under any circumstances.

ProficientNeeds ImprovementNot EvidentIntroduction: Overview

Points:

13.5 (10%)

Provides an overview of the issue being analyzed and briefly describes main points of argument

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10.13 (7.5%)

Provides an overview of the issue being analyzed and briefly describes main points of argument but contains issues regarding accuracy

Feedback:

This should be a persuasive paper, not an informative paper on the state of road planning and construction

Points:

0 (0%)

Does not provide an overview of the issue being analyzed

Introduction: Thesis

Points:

13.5 (10%)

Composes a thesis that states the argument that will be supported and proven throughout the essay

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10.13 (7.5%)

Composes a thesis but contains issues related to clarity or relevancy

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0 (0%)

Does not compose a thesis

Feedback:

There doesn't seem to be an arguable thesis.

Body: Intent

Points:

13.5 (10%)

Writes multiple paragraphs that are focused, clearly state their intent, and build the thesis argument

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10.13 (7.5%)

Writes multiple paragraphs but writing does not build the thesis argument

Feedback:

Very few of the paragraphs are your own--most of this paper is a direct cut and paste from various and uncredited Wikipedia sites. This constitutes plagiarism. Please see the announcement at the beginning of the course concerning plagiarism and the consequences thereof.

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0 (0%)

Does not write multiple paragraphs

Body: Body Paragraphs

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40.5 (30%)

Body paragraphs communicate argument by combining thoughts and ideas with evidence

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30.38 (22.5%)

Body paragraphs communicate argument but do not combine thoughts and ideas with evidence

Feedback:

There are a few credited sources used throughout, though they aren't clearly connected to any argument. See the following for ways to compile a persuasive essay:

Points:

0 (0%)

Does not communicate argument through body paragraphs

Body: Opposing Viewpoints

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13.5 (10%)

Addresses and refutes opposing viewpoints in a way that strengthens the argument

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10.13 (7.5%)

Addresses and refutes opposing viewpoints but not in a way that strengthens the argument

Feedback:

These really aren't counterarguments to any specific argument built within the paper, though there are some sources credited.

Points:

0 (0%)

Does not address or refute opposing viewpoints

Conclusion: Review

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13.5 (10%)

Reviews claim and summarizes key supporting points of essay

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10.13 (7.5%)

Reviews claim and summarizes key supporting points but contains issues regarding alignment to the intent of the thesis

Points:

0 (0%)

Does not review claim

Feedback:

Adding several more paragraphs from Wikipedia doesn't constitute a summation of your main points.

Conclusion: Insights

Points:

13.5 (10%)

Articulates insights about argument established through the analysis, following argument logically, referring to key points or quotes used to support argument

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10.13 (7.5%)

Articulates insights about argument established through the essay, but does not follow argument logically or does not refer to key points or quotes used to support claim

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0 (0%)

Does not articulate insights about argument

Feedback:

There needs to be insight to the argument given here as well as an emphasis on concluding evidence.

Articulation of Response

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13.5 (10%)

Submission has no major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization

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10.13 (7.5%)

Submission has major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that negatively impact readability and articulation of main ideas

Feedback:

Format according to APA standards. You need to proofread the text that is your own for usage (their/there), fragments, and agreement.

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0 (0%)

Submission has critical errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that prevent understanding of ideas

Raw Total: 70.88 (of 135.0)

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