I would like my essay revise and sounding professional . I am in need of making my personal statement sound amazing because I am using it for OT...

I would like my essay revise and sounding professional . I am in need of making my personal statement sound amazing because I am using it for OT School . This is what I am suppose to talk about and I think I did but i just need corrections and revision done to it please .

my Personal Essay should address why you selected OT as a career and how an Occupational Therapy degree relates to your immediate and long-term professional goals. Describe how your personal, educational, and professional background will help you achieve your goals. The personal essay is an important part of your application for admission and provides you with an opportunity for you to clearly and effectively express your ideas.