Paper revision Link to paper https://www.mediafire.com/file/qb1m5nck2a60i3p/Future+like+ours.docx/file feedback from professor: I looked at your paper. I have some thoughts on how to improve clarity

Paper revision 

Link to paper https://www.mediafire.com/file/qb1m5nck2a60i3p/Future+like+ours.docx/file

feedback from professor: 

I looked at your paper. I have some thoughts on how to improve clarity, precision, and argument. 

1. Let's be even more clear and precise about what Marquis means by a "future like ours". He means that humans have certain activities, goals, plans, etc that are unique to humans--writing books, graduating from college, running a marathon, etc. This idea is similar to Mill's idea of higher pleasures. By killing someone, we are taking away someone's ability to participate in these activities, set these kinds of goals, make those kinds of plans. That is one of the worst harms you can cause someone. So say more to explain WHY Marquis thinks a future like ours is important and what a future like ours means.

 2. Explain WHY contraception shows that a future like ours begins at implantation, not conception. It might help to talk about various kinds of birth control and whether they are interfering with a "future like ours". And how your answer might potentially be different if a future like ours starts at conception instead. In general, just make sure you are making your paper as clear and precise as possible. You want someone who has never taken the class and has never done any of the readings to be able to read your paper and fully understand what you are trying to say.