please rewrite the introduction paragraph, it is so broad, my teacher require us to fully serve for our thesis statement, use your own words, use

please rewrite the introduction paragraph, it is so broad, my teacher require us to fully serve for our thesis statement, use your own words, use common words that people speaks in their daily life.do not use empty words that does not make any sense . be specific. the source i want use is 1. a lot of career opportunaty,2. my interest 3.i have sensitive to numbers(means i'm good at math) find sources and explain as much as you can. like the sample i attached before. look back i posted before.Thanks.