Really need somebody to revise my essay for clarity and most importantly add solid analysis. I have gotten my essay back and was told I need to...

Really need somebody to revise my essay for clarity and most importantly add solid analysis. I have gotten my essay back and was told I need to really improve my argument through analysis. Tips will be given for anybody who adds 4-5 strong analysis points to the body paragraphs. Feel free to rearrange the text and add material or delete material,  but do not take out any of my sourced information or the information that builds up to the source information.

Simply add context if i forgot to explain "who" "what" or "where" for a certain sentence. 

No sources needed I have all the sources I need and can connect your analysis through them.

I also need you to look at the format of my bibliography for Chicago style and see if there is any wrongdoings. 

Finally point out any grammatical issues, sentence structure issues, or facts that aren't backed up. 

Remember, this is not just reading over and pointing out the issues I really need somebody can analyze the mostly descriptive writing, and add analysis to it. 

Remember, tips given for good work!