The instructions are:

I am needing help with writing my college admission essay for an accelerated BSN program.

The instructions are:

The personal statement should address your desire and motivation to pursue a career in nursing. This statement should be no more than 500 words. 

I have started working on it and I am needing help on making it better and finishing it please and thank you for your time.

Working Personal Essay Working Progress:

I am born and raised in the Philippines and had moved to the United States on October 2010 to be with my grandmother. Growing up I was thought by grandmother's sisters to always try my best on everything whether it is at school, family, or my job no matter how hard the obstacles are I aimed for success. To support myself financially with daily needs and school I work full time and at times sign up for extra shifts when I am not needing to study extra for school. On March 2014 up to March 2016 I worked 16 hours shift, 2 days in a row every weekend at Garden Valley Nursing and Rehabilitation Center. When I did not have classes in the morning I would work 8 hours shift in the afternoon or night and vice versa if I had school in the afternoon. In doing so, I was able to pay for my car, insurance, needs, school, and help my grandmother. Working for Garden Valley had been a wonderful experienced. I mostly worked in the Alzheimer's unit and I loved being able to take care of the elderly population with an everyday mindset of "I care for my patients like I would my grandmother". On March I had moved on to work 12 hours shift full time for Shawnee Mission Medical Center in Kansas and I still currently work for them. It is great to experience a different setting but still take care of patients no matter what their age and or symptoms are.  

When I was 8 years old swimming with my aunt Rose in their private pool she had a seizure. I was able to put a piece of the spoon in a towel in her mouth while I swam her back out the pool. As I was yelling to her son, my cousin, "Call 911!" I was doing CPR. It was the longest 10 minutes of my life It felt like eternity. Ever since that day I had wanted to make a difference by helping people to the best of my abilities. I am thankful that my other two aunts were nurses and they had taught me some basic medical knowledge that I was able to utilize it and save my Aunt's life.  

I believe I am a good candidate for this program because  

Lastly, If I can get in the Accelerated BSN program in MidAmerica University I will absorb all the knowledge and training that is taught and utilize it to do what I love most which is to help other individuals medically, emotionally, and spiritually by taking care of them with all my brains and heart.