essay corrections and rehab

attached are previous papers that lead into this one.

The third strike is the first draft. neighborhood patrol  is the second draft.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B0QmECZPnLPhNWNwelJOZFJ2S00/view?usp=sharing

Your final draft must be no less than 4 pages, not including the reference page. It must be longer and more refined than your second draft. This paper must follow APA style format, and include in-text citations and a reference page. Be sure to proofread your final paper and run the spell and grammar checkers before submitting. 

Note: please read the microphone instructions and then conduct a live test of your microphone during either the small group chat or office hour session this week. T