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Fixing a critical thinking essay
1 fragments - incomplete sentences, grammar errors - like agreement and tense.
2 introductions should introduce the topic and set the order for things to come
3 thesis statement should include the topic and your argument. Needing the thesis is more specific.
4 adding one sources which are not WIKIPEDIA or WEBSTER's.