I am applying for transfer and I just need this revised and make it look good. I have always enjoyed science and chemistry is study of composition,...

I am applying for transfer and I just need this revised and make it look good.  

I have always enjoyed science and chemistry is study of composition, properties, and behaviors of matters. Since I joined the military my passion for science increased as I studied to become a pharmacy specialist and worked for years now. It is fascinating to see how little medication reacts in human body.  I believe chemistry is the central of science because it connects the physical and life science. My ultimate goal is to become a doctor and chemistry major will take me where I want to be because it covers all the requirements I need for medical schools.