I have to submit a descriptive English paper. The following conditions apply: Topic sentence body sentences - must appeal to the senses (sight,...

I have to submit a descriptive English paper.

The following conditions apply:

Topic sentence
body sentences - must appeal to the senses (sight, sound, smell)
coherence: descriptive transitions, order (at least 3 transitions)
Related sentences: repeat words and ideas using synonyms and substitutions.
use at least one of each of the following: coordinating conjunction, semicolon, conjunctive adverb, subordinate clause followed by an independent clause.
A well written concluding sentence.

My questions are:

Is the topic sentence strong and does it make sense? (highlighted blue)
Is the body sentences correct (do they reflect the topic?)
Is it coherent? Are the transitions used correctly? (highlighted yellow)
Are related word, phrases, ideas used as synonyms correctly? (highlighted grey)
Are the following used correctly: coordinating conjunction, semicolon, conjunctive adverb, subordinate clause followed by an independent clause? (highlighted green)
Is the concluding sentence strong and efficient?
Is the paragraph length acceptable?

Paper is posted below:

Thank you.

Julius Jeppe

AC1902553

EN120 - ENGLISH COMPOSITION I

Assignment 2 - Descriptive paragraph

29th March 2019

The South African peninsula.

. A favorite spot that is worth traveling to is Leeukop or Lion's Head. Unquestionably, an ideal area to experience the sights, the sounds and the aromas of the region. , it is possible to view the entire peninsula in a distinct frame. Be sure to keep one's lunch under lock and key baboons sit and wait to grab whatever they can. Keeping possessions locked up is a good idea wildlife can gain access to it. , Table Mountain can be seen still standing tall and majestic as ever. , white clouds begin to roll in resembling a tablecloth a popular creative idea that entered the cultural lexicon in the 1800s. , there is a view of the Van Riebeeck castle indeed, an incredible and strange sight amidst tall skyscrapers and modern structures. , the Cape Town harbor brings fishmongers and lobster trappers from far and wide playing host to a whole array of cruise ships, yachts, and fishing vessels. In the front of the bay, it is possible to see endless stretches of white beaches as the gleam of afternoon light beams construct a verisimilar sunset. . Occasionally, Cape Town will consume the senses with the visual appeal of a never-ending blue skyline, The smell of fresh seawater and the feel of cool ocean mist on warm skin. In conclusion, whether someone chooses to espouse their feelings about the peninsula or keep it as a hidden treasure; undoubtedly, it remains a unique place with rich and rewarding experiences to contemplate.