It is 1500 words essay on topic "Red meat, a healthy food or a source of a Cancer/Cardiovascular Diseases" where I have to discuss both benefits and disadvantages of consuming red meat. I have alread

It is 1500 words essay on topic "Red meat, a healthy food or a source of a Cancer/Cardiovascular Diseases" where I have to discuss both benefits and disadvantages of consuming red meat.  I have already written it and submitted it but did not get good marks. I will upload my written essay as well and feedback of my professor on that as well. 

Instructions:

1: you don't have to start from scratch -- it means improving on my original essay with the feedback that my professor gave me.(I will attach both original essay and feedback)

2: Original question posted by professor was like this:

A number of studies have shown that regular consumption of red meat can lead to cancer and cardiovascular disease. However, other studies have shown that meat protein, including red meat, has many health benefits. Do those benefits outweigh the costs of eating red meat?•

Source forbackground reading: https://mcgill.ca/oss/article/health/heres-my-beef-pro-meat-study