Need help critiquing elevator pitch, my pitch needs to be (40-60 characters) Is this a good pitch how can I improve?

" Hello, Mr. President, it's nice to meet you. I was on my way to class today, and the funniest thing occurred to me. I can attend and excel leaving this university with the same diploma as any man, but I will never get to experience equal pay. Do me a favor and ask your wife her views on the issue."