The draft essay attached needs to be revised into a better essay based off the comments below. The argument is generally clear and well-supported, Though it is a bit confusing why the first parag

The draft essay attached needs to be revised into a better essay based off the comments below. 

The argument is generally clear and well-supported, Though it is a bit confusing why the first paragraph focuses on skate parks when the report is about reducing littering. A question I have is who will be responsible for impeding these bags that are placed around everywhere?

There are some claims made in the body paragraph that need an in text citation to support them, such as the University of Michigan study. There are only five sources on the reference page, but the assignment directions require a minimum of 7.

The organization is generally logical with clear guidance, though the first paragraph seems to be a part of an entirely different argument. Please make sure all paragraphs are focused on the same topic of either reducing littering or building a skate park, so the report is cohesive and logical.