Essay Help

I need help with my paper attached is a copy and someone please edit. My teacher left me with these Statements

Please find a more engaging way to begin a writing sample than SUBJECT is…Work on stronger attention-getters. Think about using a quote, shocking statistic, song lyrics, a rhetorical question, a brief anecdote, etc.

So far I have summary - what do you plan to prove in your paper? Please continue to work on formulating strong thesis statements. THESIS = SUBJECT + OPINION + PREVIEW. The thesis statement will state an opinion and preview the organization of your paper and will provide a roadmap for your reader to follow